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It was a miracle to behold. We both watched her run away from us through the cathedral archway, the sun, becoming more golden as it began it's long setting, highlighting our love's perfect flowing dress. My brother and I turned from her. His dark eyes had in them a thousand accusations. I imagine mine to be the same from his perspective. Since our joint birth we had a subtle competition between us that had festered as a septic wound, seeping silently throughout our activities. We both attended what were effectively opposing schools, studied opposing martial arts and had opposing philosophies and activities. I had opted to travel the world and experience all I could, he had chosen to make one area his home and work. I had studied slow moving open-handed disciplines and he had acquired a hard-fisted power. I smirked at my thoughts.
"What's so funny, Hedge?" My twin scowled, teeth near-bared.
Despite his ferocity in appearance and manner, I knew his heart to be kind and chivalrous. Dark on the outside with a light filled core I replied casually, "Simply that we're so different in every aspect and yet both of us fell for the same woman"
"I see what you mean," his new expression a bitter reflection of my own, "What with you being so 'saintly', right? Even despite what you do for a living..."  
Despite my desire to remain aloof I felt my expression cloud, uncontrolled. I could deny the truth no longer. I was truly a heartless excuse of a human being. In the dark recesses of my hollow shell I had to grin, to giggle. I managed to stop it from bubbling through me and past my lips, exacerbating Hedge had never been a good idea in the past. Our mutual object of affection, Jessica Farrowson, had been right. We were a walking, talking Yin and Yang. Only the Yin Yang balances itself out. We had slowly destroyed all around us as though a typhoon or plague and she was all that was left. Were we going to be responsible for her demise as well?

My hand dropped to my pistol with that unnatural speed I had come to revel in, my heart quickening before I realised sharply that Hedge in his infinite suspicion had thought to do exactly what I had intended to do. As my barrel was levelled his own rose into my field of vision, a shining spear proclaiming destruction. I moved as his hammer cracked. He dropped as my own snapped. Using my momentum I shot a kick backwards as I pivoted. It met air. My training returned to me and I moved for cover in one lithe leap, eyes darting perceptively to see where my target had gone. My target had leapt precariously onto the windowsill of the cathedrals aged large, ornate stained glasses and I would've fired but for a startling thought Target? He's your brother...

Unlike me he seemed to have no such conscience inflicting him. Roughly he dropped from his perch, his eyes boring into mine over the short ruined walls. It was like staring into a truly infinite abyss. Instinct struck me again, sharply, as if a reprimand. I kicked off backwards as he made to vault the wall, swinging my leg up just far enough to send the dry grainy dirt into his eyes. Hedge was never the most graceful of people to begin with. He fell forwards and rolled painfully, in contrast to my fluid movement up onto my feet. My eyes narrowed and once more I addressed him as nothing more than a pay less kill. A necessary kill. Before I could pull the trigger he had kicked out awkwardly but the force was enough that it knocked my side arm from my hand. It clattered into the cathedral as Hedge groped for his own revolver but I would not allow him an inch of ground over me. We had come here to settle this, once and for all. Dragging him from the hair I spun him over my shoulder and tenaciously he took me with him. The golden waning sun beat down on us as we struck at each other, circling and pushing each other deeper and deeper into the conflict we had created, deeper into the cathedral. Each strike was replied by a kick, each time we had managed to gather our firearms the other of us did everything to remove them. Every second stretched past, bringing forth blood, bruises, battered hearts and bedraggled breaths. The sun had near set now. Purple overtones highlighted our feud. My vision blurred.

When I opened my eyes, I was staring down the barrel of a gun. A custom S&W Model 10 combat revolver, the word 'Morte' carved into the side of the barrel. It was my present to him, all those years ago. I surged up but took a slug in the shoulder, forcing me to the floor like a leash around my neck. Or more like a noose. Breathlessly I smiled up at him, resigning myself to fate.
"Do it, Hedge"
The barrel in my hazy vision shook. I refocused on it's wielder, seeing his chest heaving through his bloodstained shirt, tears rolling shamelessly down his face.
"Why do I have to do this, Lucas? Why..." I watched him choke on his words. I felt regret for the first time in my life
"Because..." I paused, "I dragged you into my world. I misguided and poisoned your life, brother mine. She...loves you" I didn't know if this was true or a lie, she seemed to love as both. As I accepted my fate, pulling the barrel directly over my heart, I looked at the scarred and broken face of my twin. Contorted in sadness I saw sill resolve burning in his eyes. I had been the one to take everything from him, like a poacher. This was only right. I had scarred and broken that face. Clarity comes at odd times.
"I love you Hedge Wesson."
"I love you too, Lucas Wesson"
As life seeped from me as though finally free of some infernal bond, I lolled my head to the side as the sun set. Through that great arch I once more thought I saw her running, her dress billowed marvellously behind her.
I smiled.
©2008-2009 ~ArrancarSemiazas
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My entry to a certain competition. It's not too bad, I thought. Tad long.

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:iconsakanoue:
Oh my God that made me cry so much. You know when you talk about twins like that I think of our twins! *weeps* It was so good, I just adored it, I absolutely cannot enter now. It was just... better than anything I could ever do.

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:iconarrancarsemiazas:
Don't talk bull and enter, damn you >_<

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:iconsakanoue:
I shall try... >_>

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"Of all the days that I have lived, only those I spent with you seemed real."

LxItachi anyone? ==> [link]
[link] <== Or some marvelous dance?
:iconirrevocablefate:
Intense, a great entry for the competition! Using all three, eh? :giggle: That was a great idea. I loved the ending as it was bitter-sweet and left me rolling in the thoughts of sibling love and hate relationships. Good job and good luck in the challenge! ^^

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:iconmasked-maestro:
Yes, good luck in the challenge!

I am surprised that someone has done all three! I mean, I suppose I could have guessed that at least someone would have done so, but reading what the entry is now, it is bloody brilliant!

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"Do not the most moving moments of our lives find us without words?" -Marcel Marceau
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:iconriencuran:
Oh my. That was brilliant...the description and the ending was beautiful.

I'm going to go cry now. :cries:

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A purpose of human life, no matter who is controlling it, is to love whoever is around to be loved.
-Kurt Vonnegut
:iconczarewich:
It seems our entries have a similar opening and theme heh. Totally unintentional, I only just read yours now. Mine is more ambiguously referring to death though. Yours is direct and distinct. Good job.

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:iconthe-literati:
Here we are, your critique. Thank you so much for this entry, it really made my day.

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RESPONSE TO PROMPT – You were the only entrant attempt to use all three prompts. There nothing in the rules against that, I just didn’t honestly think someone could do it. It’s a very original and interesting idea. I also love what you did with those prompts. How the girl is only a passing mention and the setting is what you took, the sibling rivalry, taken to an extreme. The first line wasn’t exactly what the prompt dictated, but two out of three isn’t bad.

CONTENT – Good lord this story almost made me cry. Your descriptions of combat and your final few moments at the end, perfect balance between the fast pace aggression and the heart wrenching loss of balance between the two. I am assuming you have brothers, because you really captured a sort of… brotherly love, if that is he right phrase.

TECHNIQUES – It might seem basic, but I love how you describe moments and feelings without having to go into too much detail, like without stating they are twins you just mention “joint birth” but at other moments you go into so much detail, like talking about Hedge’s gun, lovely contrast.

FLOW/READABILITY – It read amazingly well, much better than I thought. I am usually awful with combat scenes I just skim over them to get to the dialogue, but this was engrossing and thoroughly readable. I couldn’t tell you why though, sorry.

THINGS I REALLY LIKED – The end. “I looked at the scarred and broken face of my twin. Contorted in sadness I saw sill resolve burning in his eyes… I had scarred and broken that face. Clarity comes at odd times… I once more thought I saw her running, her dress billowed marvellously behind her.” How Lucas only thinks he sees her, it was so beautiful.

THINGS NOT SO MUCH (THE BIT I HATE TO DO) – I think it’s probably just your style and my preference, but the most beautiful moments were at the start and the end, I would have liked to have seen more dialogue between the brothers, but as I say, you probably prefer to write fights ^_^

OVERALL – Just stunning. I have to say, you really do have an ability to create characters out of nothing and give them so much weight and history without using a great deal of words. And I don’t think this entry is too long at all!

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:iconfrancine1991:
:D I really enjoyed that. Full of beautiful emotion and imagery. You had tears in my eyes, damn you! I'm not wearing waterproof mascara! :shakefish:

Seriously amazing piece.

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